Tanner McDougal
Learning outcome #1
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Analysis:
After looking at the first draft of my project two and the final draft, one can see the massive difference between the two without even reading a single word. However, the major difference in word count pales in comparison to the actual revision that was done between draft one and draft four. It is important to note that on project one, I only had a rough draft and a final draft. I believe that this was due to me having quite a bit of confusion on what I really needed to look for when it comes to revision. Fortunately, I learned quite a bit between projects one and two regarding revision and it is very clear. The first way that I have learned to engage with revision is through local revision. This revision includes things such as sentence-level errors. When it comes to local revision, I did not engage myself as much as I should have in project one. I skimmed over some sentences to make sure there were not any glaringly obvious grammatical or spelling errors. In project two however, I made sure to thoroughly read through each sentence to make sure everything was correct such as making perspectives agree such as first or third person, using correct punctuation, using the correct form of there, their, or they’re, and making sure that I use commas correctly. Along with local revision, I have made great improvements with my ability to make global revisions. One major global revision one can notice from reading draft one and draft four is the difference between the thesis of the first draft and final draft. Editing the thesis multiple times was very necessary in my revision process because I needed to make sure that it matched what I was arguing and trying to prove, as well as creating a stance that made sense based on what the rubric for the project explained. Along with editing my thesis, I have learned how to rethink my body paragraphs regarding what exactly I want to argue. At times I have had to rethink my own opinion and what I would argue. More specifically regarding paper two, I went from planning to argue how the Food Network has completely brainwashed the entire United States, to arguing how there is variation among the population in that some people still find comfort in cooking their favorite meals for themselves. Through practice of multiple drafts, I have learned ways to effectively edit global concerns such as revising my thesis so that it matches my body paragraphs and conclusion and rethinking what I actually believe in the middle of my writing process.
